HELP REVISE MY PAPER PLEASE GOT TO TURN IT IN TOMARROw?

No paragraph development whatsoever. No transitions, or separation of thoughts. wow that was pretty bad. Intro needs work and there is no Conclusion at all. the info is there but actually write an essay instead of just pittng down thoughts. Change up word choices and scentence beggining and structure. I think the info is a little bit bland. Addsomething to entice the reader...